In the sapphire of your earrings
the cost of my this evening,
sparkles like a canto of conscience.
I've bought your smiles at bargains
that rob my nights of honest sleep
and twitch eyebrows, I'd rather not see.
These notes in your lies amuse me;
peering at me through white wine,
your caricature appears dismal, distant.
After tonight, I will part with your sheets.
But today, I'll dip my tongue in the pallette
of fiery hues; pay homage to sappire earrings.
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vivs
By bilbobaggins on Sun, 2006-11-19 22:10
my this evening?!!
with thanksgiving coming around, I must say this. Every time you post somthing, I rush to dictionary.com just to check that what I am thinking about a word is correct. So thanks a bunch.
this time I checked for canto. I knew it was part of a poem . So did u mean it like it that. or is “canto of conscience” there cus it sounds good. ( as a phrase it does, but not the way it is placed in the poem) .
Just wondering .
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meaning of canto
By Vivek on Mon, 2006-11-20 00:05
… in songs canto is like chorus…. and hence canto is like a repeated line in a poem… and if its our conscience…. canto of conscience could refer to that refrain that resonates in ur head…
now the reason it jars is the reason why I wanted it there… something that sparkles… visual sense… causes canto of conscience… hearing/wordy sentiment…. (and as per ur suggestion, I went and checked dictionary.com myself:)… we are so full of words, hai na?)
We may dislike the metaphor, and maybe the meaning of the word as is used here is more for the secondary meaning it has…. I’ll keep this in mind while revising though:) Usually words that stick out are either a brilliant usage, or a mistaken usage: I am myself in doubt about many choices I make.
As always bilbo, I love your love of words and their connotations. Thats bread and butter of us poets, and you always be my guiding light:)
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Just to carry forward that discussion
By bilbobaggins on Mon, 2006-11-20 00:53
If you meant it to sparkle in a visual sense, why have the word sparkle before it. thats overkill. don’t you think. Also, I may have mentioned it before, but, the aim of any creative effort should be to nudge the reader into a direction , not point out the alley or road he is meant to take. So show, don’t tell.
As for canto, dictionary com suggests it is the main or significant part of a bigger poem. So dante’s inferno would be a canto of his bigger poem abt hell and perdition ( divine comedy)
Chorus or refrain does not really do justice to a word as elegant as canto.
As an aside, this is good fun , early in the morning. So, thanks again .
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"Can'to" of canto
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By Vivek on Mon, 2006-11-20 03:37
We both can afford some brevity by assuming we are thankful for the existence of each other:) (So henceforth, thou shall be required to assume that they (my thanks) are accompanying my posts)
Perhaps chorus is not the word I should have used, canto (of poetry) is significant part of a poem while in music, it is, in words of dictionary.com for example, “the highest part (usually the melody) in a piece of choral music.”
“sparkles like a canto of conscience” is an odd phrase, and I seem to be captivated by it, atleast tonight:) But I have been thinking about it, and will tell you if my rapture ends in rupture of the phrase.
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denice _menace comments: on Nov 19 2006 11:38PM
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okie but furst gimme those earrings
Vivek Sharma comments: on Nov 20 2006 8:21AM
delete this comment - block this userThats too much to ask ;)
and too much for me to afford ;)
scrivener comments: on Dec 4 2006 3:41AM
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Hi
i am a journalist with the Indian Epress, a newspaper in India. I am writing an article on literary blogging.
what is usually the profile of a literary blogger?
Is he generally an aspiring author or critic?
Other than english, in which languages is literary blogging popular?
Why hasnt literary blogging yet not flourished in india in india in the way it has in the west?
And, above all what made you take up blogging?
I would be really grateful if you answer these questions.looking forward to your reply,
arunima
Vivek Sharma comments: on Dec 4 2006 5:36PM
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I will try to answer your questions as well as I can. Read on:
what is usually the profile of a literary blogger?
Most literary bloggers are people who have some literary aspirations, and need to express their thoughts without having to deal with editors, reviewers and publishing hurdles. This can include students, office employees, and housewives: the time spent on blogging is dictated by how many free hours your other activities allow you.
Is he generally an aspiring author or critic?
Aspiration is usually there, though I guess only few of the bloggers are willing to back themselves into the world of being identified as published author or a critic. A few like me use blogging as the platform for presenting our experimental work, and experimental critiques, as a means of furthering our ability to write well. The transiton to the real published world requires more than simple aspiration, and more commitment than blogworld does.
Other than english, in which languages is literary blogging popular?
I have friends who write in their respective European languages. I believe number of non-English bloggers in India is negligible compared to English bloggers.
Why hasnt literary blogging yet not flourished in india in india in the way it has in the west?
The simple reason is the number of hours that a person in west spends online is much more than what people do in India. It also reflects how in Indian society we still have social and family structure which requires one to communicate to people in person: in west, the interpersonal communication is so limited, that blogworld offers an easy escape and medium for communication.
And, above all what made you take up blogging?
I am an aspiring author and a poet. Blogging presents an opportunity to get feedback from people about everything I post. Blogging also allows me to express my views about several socio-political issues, and in some way, influence public opinion. I am hoping to make a transition to the published world in a year or two, and then blogging would continue to be my message board, where I can air my views, experiements and receive feeedback from my readers.
beautiful words!! nice feeling!!
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